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Charlie Walls's avatar

Jeeze that's awesome!

Stefan Pasek's avatar

Awe thanks. Im happy you liked my weird dolls in a tunnel of love story. 😊

HVR's avatar

The build was not slow. It echoed and ached.

Stefan Pasek's avatar

Thank you!

Alicia's avatar

This made me feel a little sad... forgotten places.

Stefan Pasek's avatar

It had like a island of misfit toys feel to me when I wrote it.

Alicia's avatar

I totally agree.

Donna Turnley's avatar

I knew it would be great with the first line, “my left eye a glass globe meant to probe the void.” Well done!

Stefan Pasek's avatar

I hope it lived up to that first line. 😂I like the idea of a animated doll with a lazy left eye.

A Writer’s Voice's avatar

This was great. Creeped me the hell out. I have a fear of dolls. lol But I enjoyed this immensely.

Gary L Taylor's avatar

I enjoyed that. Having looked at the prompt, it definitely carries that weird, unhinged feel that was asked for.

Stefan Pasek's avatar

I think this is the least enthused I’ve seen you. Was it too weird for you? 😂 It was pretty weird.

Gary L Taylor's avatar

It wasn't too weird. I think it was the right amount of weird. I did very much enjoy it.

Amber Patton's avatar

Beautiful alliteration! Wonderful! Subscribed!

Stefan Pasek's avatar

Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed it, it’s always a risk when a newcomer stops by on a weird story 😂

Amber Patton's avatar

I'm always here for something interesting!

M.O.Stewart Writes Dark Stuff's avatar

Really loved this — imagery, alliteration, the puppet-speak and romanticism — all of it!

Stefan Pasek's avatar

Thank you so much. This was a pretty weird one, so I’m happy it’s not too weird for people. 😊

M.O.Stewart Writes Dark Stuff's avatar

I didn’t think it was weird at all! I liked it